Attempted Query 1
Mostly for my own benefit, here’s my initial attempt at a query for this story.
Dear Agent’s Minion:
Some heroes are born to greatness while others stumble into it. For Dr. Emma Earl, the road to greatness is a long and painful one.
It begins when she is the lone survivor of a car crash that kills her parents. Throwing herself into her studies, Emma becomes a researcher at the elite Plaine Museum, where she hopes to work for the rest of her life. A monster in black armor known as the Black Dragoon derails those plans by nearly disemboweling her during a charity gala.
In the hospital, Emma is led by her mother’s ghost to a hidden cavern beneath the museum. There she finds a suit of red plate armor that allows her to jump long distances, deflect bullets, and turn invisible. By putting on this armor, Emma becomes the latest in a line of heroes known as the Scarlet Knight, the evil Dragoon’s sworn enemy.
But to stop him, Emma must first face up to the personal demons she’s dodged most of her life.
A Hero’s Journey is a 100,000-word novel that begins not only Emma’s path to greatness as a hero, but as a person as well.
Does that last line make sense? I’m trying to convey that over the course of the series she becomes a mature woman as well as a hero. Hurm.
Probably a little wordy. Have to work on tweaking that.
Until our next attempt…